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Question: Are cell phones necessary in teenage's lives?
Everywhere you go, you see people on their cell phones. Technology is becoming more advanced. Cell phones are
not neccary in teenage's lives because it's addicted, it affects their learning, costly.
Approximately, the average teen uses his/her cell phones are 8 hours a day. Cell phones are addicting. Teenagers use
cellphones for texting, talking, social media, snapchat, facebook, and tons more. It's useless and not worth their time.
They don't need to have a cell phone to text their friends because students can talk to them in person. They can do
other things like reading, going outside with friends, shopping, chores in the house, and more.
Cell phones affects student's grades and distracts them. It's rude when students use cell phones while a
teacher is talking and they don't pay attention. Students text their friends during a lesson. When students
use cellphones so much, they don't have time to complete their homework. So they start to get lower grades.
With the increasing number of cell phone users, the cost is increasing. The cost of one cell phone bill is at least
$80 a month. In total that would be more than $900. That's a lot of money. The money could be spent on a
student's education or another worthy thing.
In conclusion, cell phones are not necessary because they are costly, affects student's grades, addicting.
overall this essay is bad and needs to be at least 2 pages. So can you make it better?