RHani wrote:Yosemite national park
Have you ever wanted to visit a place filled with variety of activities and allows you to relax and enjoy a beautiful landscape at the same time? If so, then Yosemite National Park is the right place [or choice] for you.
Yosemite National Park is located in California, USA. If you are in the US, then you can get to the park by a road trip. Otherwise, you can refer to the park's website to help you in planning for your trip. <~~That seems quite fuzzy. Why not say people will need to take planes and then rent cars?
The park is full of breathtaking sites. For example, Yosemite Falls, where you can stand at the base of the waterfall and take mesmerizing photos to show to your friends. Do not worry! It is secure! Furthermore, there are other places like Half Dome, El Capitan, and Tunnel View where you can enjoy climbing and hiking. Moreover, there are many activities that you can participate in. For example, camping in the heart of the woods which will give you a unique experience. <~~That's a fragment; either attach it somehow to the previous sentence or make it a complete sentence on its own.
We <~~Who are "we"? have very hospitable employees to help our visitors. <~~to fix the wordiness. I strongly encourage you to have a look at the park's brochure. Try to book your trip as soon as possible since we have a special offer for the first 50 visitors starting from 21st February 2017 until the end of the month.
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